100 words of Metal!
A pile of rubbish and scrap metal made into one extraordinary creature. Who knows what it is supposed to be or do? Why did anyone think about building this strange object of many objects? There must be tyres, cookers, sinks, wash machines and much, much more! How much does it weigh? What, in meters, is it’s measurement in height or width? Whatever the answer is, this interesting creation looks immense in size! Its body of this and that is many colours with a huge assortment of metal within. Although it is extremely tall, its incredibly long tail helps it to balance.
October 5th, 2012 at 18:21
I hope you liked my paragraph. I’ll be adding more writing on soon, hopefully. I’m writing a story which will be and this webbie soon enough!
October 5th, 2012 at 19:25
Wow, what a great short piece of writing, I like the way you used exclamation marks. I also like the way you used although as an opener. Maybe you could use some words like gargantuan instead of big.
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October 7th, 2012 at 18:12
Well done Emma; great descriptive language in a very well-written and correctly punctuated piece! I particularly like your use of rhetorical questions. (Just check your use of its and it’s) I shall look forward to reading more!
Miss Lally
October 9th, 2012 at 06:23
I love the range of vocabulary you have used in this piece; the different sentence give it a good flow. Very impressive!
October 9th, 2012 at 16:56
I really enjoyed reading your 100wc i liked the way you asked questions within the paragraph. I am looking forward to your story!
October 11th, 2012 at 13:03
loved reading it emma really imformitive
October 12th, 2012 at 00:42
Hello Emma,
I really enjoyed reading you 100wc it was rather exciting to read your short story, especially with your use of vocabulary and how you described what was going on and how. I would think that if you wrote an actual story. It would be quite a fast paced book.
I hope you write more 100 word challenges, it will be exciting to hear from you again.
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